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I tried to write you a song,
But my head refused to write.
All the words came out wrong,
and the melody didn't sound right.

I tried to write a Poem,
But the words wouldn't rhyme.
A piece dedicated to you as a omen,
but I was having nothing but a hard time.

I tried to write you a story,
But ideas were getting pretty tight.
It was suppose to end with you winning in glory,
But instead you lost the fight.

Writing you something, I tried, tried and tried.
But the truth is, I'm not a writer, I just lied.
©2005-2009 ~PrettyPower
:iconprettypower:

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This is another older piece that I recently modified. It's about how I want to be a writer...

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:iconterraskewl:
First words when I saw this: Sorta funny, if you didn't mean it that way then it wasn't, but i thought the last rhyme was quite funny.

An Awesome Comment: GREAT JOB, you say you're not a writer, but your wrong...

What you could improve on: Nothing, it is perfect the way it is, AND the ending gave me a feeling of completeness, a feeling that you had finished what you wanted to say, Perfect. Good Job!!!!

--
"And those vultures sitting next to us,
Are just waiting for me to mess up.
And that's why I can't say anything more to you"
:iconprettypower:
:wow:

A comment from a stranger...thank you so much it made my day :)

Yeah it was suppose to sorta be funny, a contradiction I guess.

Thanks again, I appreciate the comment, more than you'll ever know.

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PrettyPower will never be her power...

"When you hear a great song, it touches your life. it affects you, it's like a scent, it reminds you of something. you fuck to it, you feel blue to it, you feel great to it.."

-Courtney Love
:iconkrackels89:
umm...yeah you lied..you are such a great writer...you amaze me with how good you are...

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I need you, like a corpse needs bed springs in his coffin.
:iconprettypower:
Thank you. it means so much.

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PrettyPower will never be her power...

"When you hear a great song, it touches your life. it affects you, it's like a scent, it reminds you of something. you fuck to it, you feel blue to it, you feel great to it.."

-Courtney Love
:iconsilverwolf71190:
it's really good

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Sweet sounds of music
Fill the air like perfume,
Yet not strong enough to silence
All the sounds of the night.

Love The Beatles! :peace:
:iconbrokenrhythm:
and of course this is really good, and you DID lie. ^.^ Your an amazing writer and I find myself to be a jealous of your incredible capabilities with words. :-D :heart:

--
"Just remember I will always love you,
Even as I tear your fucking throat away.
But it will end no other way."

But i'd trade it all
For just a little bit of
Peace of mind.
:iconbetsytheripper:
Wow, that's pretty damn good. You can write, don't deny it. I love it.

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fa mi ly
fishie <><
:iconhellfayrie:
I love the concept of this one.
Simple, and quirky.
Very nice.

-Chella

--
"Enlist Your Prettiest Guns To Bring Me Down"

You're no one without a song in your head.

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:iconfaint-69:
lol, liar liar pants on fire... but ur a girl so that doesnt work now does it :confused: hrm... how about panties on fire? :fart: shit! i didnt see that comming :blushes: silent but deadly... :shh:

--
I'm getting feelings I'm hiding too well
(Bury the horse shaped shell)
Something broke inside my stomach
I let the pieces lie just where they fell

Porcupine Tree - Open Car

~FåïNt-69™~

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